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2020-09-07 · 첨삭 강사 Gabby

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How do you keep a healthy relationship with your friends? To keep a healthy relationship with my friends, I try to say what I think I need to say. I have seen many friends who broke up because one of them got pissed off without telling the reason. Thus, I try to tell when and why I was hurt and what they shouldn\'t do the next time. Another thing is that I try not to raise my voice. Raising voice and shouting at each other leads to nowhere, and it is likely to say something you\'ll regret. Even when fighting, I try to stay logical and calm my mind. However, it\'s not as easy as it might seem, and so I try to stay well with my friends. Besides, fighting uses too much energy, so I apologize first when both of us did something wrong. I found out that saying a lot of \'thank you\'s and \'sorry\'s is a good way to not get in trouble with your friends. The conclusion is that to keep healthy relationship with friends, or anyone, you have to express yourself.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]. Great work! :)
-T.Gabby
To keep a healthy relationship with my friends, \\
>> Correct.
I try to say what I think I need to say. 
>> Correct.
I have seen many friends who broke up because one of them got pissed off without telling the reason. 
>>Correct.
Thus, I try to tell when and why I was hurt and what they shouldn\'t do the next time. 
>> Thus, I try to tell when and why I was hurt and what they shouldn\'t do next time. 
Another thing is that I try not to raise my voice. 
>> Correct.
Raising voice and shouting at each other leads to nowhere, and it is likely to say something you\'ll regret. 
>> Correct.
Even when fighting, I try to stay logical and calm my mind. 
>> Even when fighting, I try to stay logical and I calm my mind. 
However, it\'s not as easy as it might seem, and so I try to stay well with my friends. 
>> Correct.
Besides, fighting uses too much energy, so I apologize first when both of us did something wrong. 
>> Correct.
I found out that saying a lot of \'thank you\'s and \'sorry\'s is a good way to not get in trouble with your friends. 
>> Correct.
The conclusion is that to keep healthy relationship with friends, or anyone, you have to express yourself.
>> Correct.

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