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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [이름]!
I know a student\'s life in your country is very stressful but I believe this also help them focus on more important things in life. They know their responsibilities because it has been taught to them since they were young. Let\'s think of the brighter side of things or else we\'ll look older than our age.
Take care!
~T. Lynn
I think education of my country is very bad.
>> I think education in my country is very bad.
Because many students have a lot of stress.
>> correct!
I watched education of other countries on the internet their\'s education is very free.
>> I watched the educational system of other countries on the internet and their education is very free.
And many students looked very happy and they talked a lot of thins together and they decied everything together through discussion.
>> Many students looked very happy. They talked about a lot of things together and they decide everything together through discussion.
Nowadays my country is changing I believe my country.
>> Nowadays, education in my country is changing. I believe my country will have a better educational system in the future.
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