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학생이 쓴 원문
I watched a movie entitled Train to Busan again recently.
Last year, I watched it with my family.
This year my family watch it again.
My husband, my older daughter seemed very excited.
Story of the movie was about zombies.
Many people changed zombies.
So a main character protected his daughter from zombies.
But it was not easy.
I think story of the movie is the father's love about his child.
It was very fun and interesting.
But my younger daughter was scared watching the movie of zombies.
I was sorry about that.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
I do appreciate you sending your homework to me. Your sentences were very good but we need to correct some of your grammars and sentence structures. I do hope that you do not take these corrections as an offense but take these corrections as an opportunity for you to improve your English more ^_^
~~Teacher Kathy
Here are my corrections for you:
I watched a movie entitled Train to Busan again recently.
>> I watched the same movie entitled \"Train to Busan\" recently.
Last year, I watched it with my family.
Last year, I watched it with my family.
>> Correct!
OR:
>> Last year, my family and I watched it.
This year my family watch it again.
>> And we decided to watch it again.
My husband, my older daughter seemed very excited.
My husband, my older daughter seemed very excited.
>> My husband and my eldest daughter were very excited.
Story of the movie was about zombies.
Story of the movie was about zombies.
>> The movie was about zombies.
Many people changed zombies.
Many people changed zombies.
>> Many people turned into zombies.
So a main character protected his daughter from zombies.
So a main character protected his daughter from zombies.
>> The main character protected his daughter from zombies.
But it was not easy.
But it was not easy.
>> Correct!
OR:
>> It\'s not quite as easy as it seems.
I think story of the movie is the father\'s love about his child.
I think story of the movie is the father\'s love about his child.
>> I think the story was about the father\'s love for his child.
It was very fun and interesting.
It was very fun and interesting.
>> Correct!
OR:
>> It was fun and interesting to watch.
But my younger daughter was scared watching the movie of zombies.
But my younger daughter was scared watching the movie of zombies.
>> But my younger daughter was scared watching the zombies.
I was sorry about that.
I was sorry about that.
>> And I felt bad about that.
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