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2018-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

If I won the lottery, I first will check up my health with my family. It is very important. We can buy our health so we have to keep our health in shape when we are in good health. And than I will buy a building. I want to be owner the building.

강사 첨삭

Ms. [이름],

Health is wealth. Money is nothing if you are sick. You can\'t enjoy it. I hope you\'ll really win the lottery. If that happens, invite me to Korea and let\'s party. That would be  a blast!(\",)

Take care!(\",)

~T. Lynn

If I won the lottery, I first will check up my health with my family.

>> If I win the lottery, I\'ll go for a check up with my family.
 It is very important.

>> correct!
 We can buy our health so we have to keep our health in shape when we are in good health.

>> We can\'t buy health so we have to keep our bodies in shape while we are in good health.
 And then I will buy a building.

>> correct!
 I want to be owner the building.

>> I want to own a building.

OR>> I want to be a building owner.

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