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There are two types of people when coming to money; ones who spends it and the other who saves it.
>>There are two types of people when coming to money; one\'s who spends it and the other who saves it.
Our society urges us to be the latter, and yet I , do we know the benefits of saving money exactly?
>>CORRECT!
I, for one, thought spending money right after I earn is good for our economy.
>>CORRECT!
>>Spending my own salary helps the country\'s economy due to Value Added Tax.
However, through considering, I learned that saved money can be a financial \'back stop\' in unstable situations and increases feelings of security.
>>CORRECT!
I can also be \'seed money\' for investments such as stocks, bonds, and mutual funds.
>>It can also be a seed money for investments such as stocks, bonds, and mutual funds.
Therefore, it is important to save money.
>>CORRECT!
>>Thus, it\'s a must to save money.
Extra funds are needed for unexpected incidents.
>>CORRECT!
>>Allocated funds are necessary for economic crisis.
We never know what will happen and when we will need extra spend.
>>CORRECT!
>>We never know what will happen and when we will need an emergency fund.
In addition, usually people are more relaxed with some saved money.
>>In addition, people are usually more relaxed with some saved money.
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