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[What do you think are the main causes of conflicts between people?]
I think the main reason for conflicts between people is that they do not understand each other.
Every people has a different mind, view, and opinion.
We don\'t know what is the correct answer.
But, in many cases, people make a group having the same opinion and oppose other groups.
The representative example is politics.
There are a few parties in Korea.
Their purposes or oriented politics are different from each other.
Actually, I think they have both the right and wrong thing.
So, I can say that I agree with some of the purposes or opinions of the party, but not all.
In addition, when we talk with the people who have a different opinion with me, we should have an open mind.
First of all, we should listen to people\'s explanation and think why they think like that.
Sometimes, my mind can change due to their valid reason.
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Hi [이름]! Thank you for this wonderful homework! ^ ^ You have really improved a lot with your writing! Good job! ^ ^
I totally agree with you, it all starts with different views and opinions. Conflict arises because one party would impose on what they believe and vice versa. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>CORRECT
Every people has a different mind, view, and opinion.
Every people has a different mind, view, and opinion.
>>Every person has a different mind, view, and opinion.
We don\'t know what is the correct answer.
>>CORRECT
But, in many cases, people make a group having the same opinion and oppose other groups.
But, in many cases, people make a group having the same opinion and oppose other groups.
>>CORRECT
The representative example is politics.
The representative example is politics.
>>CORRECT
There are a few parties in Korea.
There are a few parties in Korea.
>>CORRECT
Their purposes or oriented politics are different from each other.
Their purposes or oriented politics are different from each other.
>>CORRECT
Actually, I think they have both the right and wrong thing.
Actually, I think they have both the right and wrong thing.
>>Actually, I think they both have the right and the wrong things.
So, I can say that I agree with some of the purposes or opinions of the party, but not all.
So, I can say that I agree with some of the purposes or opinions of the party, but not all.
>>CORRECT
In addition, when we talk with the people who have a different opinion with me, we should have an open mind.
In addition, when we talk with the people who have a different opinion with me, we should have an open mind.
>>In addition, when we talk with the people who have a different opinion with us, we should have an open mind.
First of all, we should listen to people\'s explanation and think why they think like that.
First of all, we should listen to people\'s explanation and think why they think like that.
>>CORRECT
Sometimes, my mind can change due to their valid reason.
Sometimes, my mind can change due to their valid reason.
>>CORRECT
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