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2014-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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1. Tell me about yourself. Whenever I sell power supply to customers, I have to be a powerful supplier to them. This is my first motor since I worked as a technical sales manager in the power supply team of TRUMPF, Korea. I got many kinds of sales and application experiences with customers in big and middle size company. That’s the why I know customer what wants and needs in technical sales field. That ability can be added with my outgoing character. Those things can be perfectly matched whenever and whoever I met customer. I am confident that my combination of practical work experience in technical sales part and lots of headquarter educational experiences and conferences can be very useful in your company.

강사 첨삭

Hello there! :)   Thank you for sending me your composition. :)) I revised the sentences so that it will be more accurate with the meaning. This way, it will be easier for the person you are talking too will understand you immediately. I hope you consider this suggestions. :))   Have a great night and I\'ll see you in class tomorrow. :))   T. Jessie ^_^   1. Tell me about yourself.Whenever I sell power supply to customers, I have to be a powerful supplier to them. >> Whenever I sell power supply to customers, I have to give them a good customer service. This is my first motor since I worked as a technical sales manager in the power supply team of TRUMPF, Korea. >> This is my first motor since I worked as a technical sales manager for the power supply team of TRUMPF, Korea. I got many kinds of sales and application experiences with customers in big and middle size company. >> I have many experiences about sales and applications when it comes to customers, whether it is a big or a middle class company. That’s the why I know customer what wants and needs in technical sales field. >> That\'s why I know what the wants and needs of customers when it comes to technical sales field. That ability can be added with my outgoing character. >> I can add this ability to my outgoing personality. Those things can be perfectly matched whenever and whoever I met customer. >> I can always use those two characteristics whenever I meet new customers whoever they may be. I am confident that my combination of practical work experience in technical sales part and lots of headquarter educational experiences and conferences can be very useful in your company. >> I am confident that with my experiences in technical sales and headquater education and conferences, I will be very useful in your company.

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