A beauty standard
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Hi there, [이름]!
Thanks for doing your homework.
The study about babies that you shared here was quite fascinating.
I guess that\'s why babies cry and toddlers run away when they see me. Hahaha!
Pease review my corrections here.
Ciao!
~Teacher Marie~ ^^
According to their surroundings, I think different races have different perceptions of what beauty is.
>> I think different races have different perceptions of what beauty is according to their environmental influences.
If physical labor is important in one society, maybe people will prefer men or women who have more muscles.
>> CORRECT!
However, I think we have to consider instinctual aspect.
>> However, I think we have to consider the aspect of instinct.
In one study, crawling babies preferred perfect symmetry faces to imperfect ones.
>> In one study, babies preferred crawling toward those with perfectly symmetrical faces.
In this experiment, researchers assumed that babies chose perfect symmetry faces by instinct because perfect symmetry faces have lower possibility in diseases.
>> In this experiment, researchers assumed that babies chose those with perfectly symmetrical faces by instinct because they have lower possibility of having diseases.
Therefore, it seems to me that each race has its own standard of beauty which connotes surroundings and instinct.
>> Therefore, it seems to me that each race has its own standard of beauty which depends on our surroundings and instinct.
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