a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal.. Which one can contribute to a child's development.

I think all kind of gifts presented above would have each point. If I choose only one, I will pick a soccer ball helping children to improve their physical abilities. First of all, it is very important to have an interest in doing outdoor activities since young. These days, many children stay home and just play computer games. To change these pattern of them, we should encourage them to go out and make them feel fun of sports. Second reason is that it is a way of developing social skill. I think playing soccer is helping make teamwork as well as healthy body. They need social activities such as sports to know how to live together. Teamwork is needed in morden society. Also winning and losing experiences can influence on their life in good way. For two reason, I prefer to give a soccer ball as a present to a child. OMG. Chalie, catching up to write undone essay is not easy. I　regret putting off writing.....

Hey there [이름]! ^^   I was surprised to see four essays from you. 0.0! Although, you did well in all of them. It is good practice because in taking the IELTS, the writing test has a big impact on your score. ^^ Good job in this one. ^^   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==       I think all kind of gifts presented above would have each point. >> I think all of these gifts would contribute to a child\'s development in their own way.   If I choose only one, I will pick a soccer ball helping children to improve their physical abilities. >> If I had to choose one, I will pick the soccer ball to help improve the child\'s physical abilities. First of all, it is very important to have an interest in doing outdoor activities since young. >> First of all, it is very important to have an interest in doing outdoor activities while a child is still young.   These days, many children stay home and just play computer games. >> CORRECT   To change these pattern of them, we should encourage them to go out and make them feel fun of sports. >> To change this, we should encourage them to go out and make them feel the fun in playing sports. Second reason is that it is a way of developing social skill. >> Second,  it is a way in developing social skills.   I think playing soccer is helping make teamwork as well as healthy body. >> I think playing with a soccer ball not only helps in having a healthy body but also helps in strengthening teamwork.   They need social activities such as sports to know how to live together. >> CORRECT   Teamwork is needed in morden society. Also winning and losing experiences can influence on their life in good way. >> Teamwork is needed in todays society and also, experiencing wins and losses can influence their lives in a good way.   For two reason, I prefer to give a soccer ball as a present to a child.>> For these two reasons, CORRECT OMG. Chalie, catching up to write undone essay is not easy. I　regret putting off writing..... >> OMG. Charlie, catching up on unwritten essays is not easy. I regret putting it off.