A concept of animals.

2010-09-27 · 첨삭 강사 Nicole

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Koreans are likely not to respect animals' right. In my opinion, the reason they are not such respectaful about animals is that they used to own domestic animals for their uses such as agriculture, family economic or even a source for protein. So, they don't think animals as their family or pet. That's why they treat pets in a wrong way. Meanwhile, we need to think about the policy of raising a pet. In the US, they have to put the row on their pet in order to prevent from attacking others and should clean up their pets' poo so that they carry plastic bags. However, I've never seen those people in Korea. As growing the population having pets, the Korean goverment need to check the law about this topic.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] J I think you have a great opinion with regards to animals’ right. :) I hope you had a great weekend. Take care and hope to hear from you the next day. Nicole.   Please check your grammar corrections J Koreans are likely not to respect animals' right. >> Koreans seem not respecting animals’ right. In my opinion, the reason they are not such respectaful about animals is that they used to own domestic animals for their uses such as agriculture, family economic or even a source for protein. >> In my opinion, the reasons they are not respecting them is because they have their own domestic animals for their own benefit such as for agriculture use and for family economic use or even a source for protein. So, they don't think animals as their family or pet. >> Correct That's why they treat pets in a wrong way. >> Correct Meanwhile, we need to think about the policy of raising a pet. >> Correct In the US, they have to put the row on their pet in order to prevent from attacking others and should clean up their pets' poo so that they carry plastic bags. >> In the US, they have to put dog’s muzzle (use to cover dog’s mouth) to their pet in order to prevent from attacking others and should clean up their pets' stools as a result they carry plastic bags with them. However, I've never seen those people in Korea. >> However, I've never seen these kinds of people here in Korea.  As growing the population having pets, the Korean goverment need to check the law about this topic. >> As the population of having pets is increasing, the Korean government needs to check the law about this topic.  

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