A failure what has made me more better.

2021-06-09 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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I want to go to The UK for working holiday in this year early. But a lot of challenges made me giving up what i hoped. I felt such as a fool, dumb and failed person. Virtually, i was knowing that i might not be went to go there. Because of there are fatigue people who have covid-19. Plus, Although i really want it, i didn’t want to make worry about me by my parents if when i went. But now, i determined to start studying English for traveling another overseas as well as UK. First of all, i have this think, i can think more and more on positive way. It result in a international nurse. It was a big failed among my whole life, but that was made me grown up as an inconceivable way before.

강사 첨삭

Good evening [이름] [이름]!^^
Keep pursuing your dreams and make them into reality. Stay positive all the time! You can do it!
Always,
Kelly^^
I want to go to The UK for working holiday in this year early. 
>> I wanted to go to the UK during my working holiday early this year.
But a lot of challenges made me giving up what i hoped. 
>> But, a lot of challenges made me give up what I hoped for.
I felt such as a fool, dumb and failed person. 
>> Correct.
Virtually, i was knowing that i might not be went to go there. 
>> Virtually, I had an inkling that I might not go there.
Because of there are fatigue people who have covid-19. 
>> Because there are people who are infected with COVID-19.
Plus, Although i really want it, i didn’t want to make worry about me by my parents if when i went. 
>> In addition, although I really wanted to travel, I didn\'t want my parents to worry if I travel there.
But now, i determined to start studying English for traveling another overseas as well as UK. 
>> So now, I am determined to start studying English so I could travel overseas soon especially in the UK.
First of all, i have this think, i can think more and more on positive way.
>> First of all, I have to think in a positive way.
>> First of all, I have to be very optimistic.
It result in a international nurse. 
>> This could help me become an international nurse.
It was a big failed among my whole life, but that was made me grown up as an inconceivable way before.
>> I have experienced a big failure in my life, but that failure gave me lessons and helped me to become more mature.

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