A famous person in Korea
학생이 쓴 원문
As you know, I am sports fanatic and really like watching Premier League which is about football in England. I want to talk about Heung-min Son who is a main member of Tottenham. There are many Korean soccer players in all over the world but of course, he is by far the best. His strength is that he can sprint really fast and doesn\'t have any weak leg. It means, supervisor and coach can use him in various position. But, unfortunately, he got an injury in his arm, so he is taking a cure in Korea and nobody can expect how it will take to get better. And since he\'s come back to Korea for cure, Tottenham lost all of 3 games and I watched a lot of video analyzing the current state of Tottenham and how they can deal with this situation. Anyway, I am really proud of him and he is also struggling to be a good player among the other best players. Cross my finger for his forward career.
강사 첨삭
1. As you know, I am sports fanatic and really like watching Premier League which is about football in England.
>>As you know, I am a sports fanatic and I really like watching Premier League which is the football in England.
2. I want to talk about Heung-min Son who is a main member of Tottenham.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I want to talk about Heung-min Son who is the main player of Tottenham.
3. There are many Korean soccer players in all over the world but of course, he is by far the best.
>>CORRECT
OR>>There are many Korean soccer players in all over the world but of course, he is by far the best.
4. His strength is that he can sprint really fast and doesn\'t have any weak leg.
>>His strength is that he can sprint really fast and his legs don\'t really get weak.
5. It means, supervisor and coach can use him in various position.
>>It means, his supervisor and his coach can put him in various positions.
6. But, unfortunately, he got an injury in his arm, so he is taking a cure in Korea and nobody can expect how it will take to get better.
>>But, unfortunately, he got an arm injury, so he is receiving medical treatment in Korea and nobody can expect how long will it take for his injury to get better.
7. And since he\'s come back to Korea for cure, Tottenham lost all of 3 games and I watched a lot of video analyzing the current state of Tottenham and how they can deal with this situation.
>>And since he\'s come back to Korea for treatment, Tottenham have lost 3 games and I watched a lot of videos analyzing the current state of Tottenham and how they can deal with this situation.
8. Anyway, I am really proud of him and he is also struggling to be a good player among the other best players.
>>Anyway, I am really proud of him and he is also working hard to be a best player player among the other best players.
9. Cross my finger for his forward career.
>>I\'m crossing my fingers for his future career.
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