A Famous Person You Admire

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I admire our former president Ro Mu Hyun. 

>>CORRECT
OR >> I hold great respect for our ex-president Roh Moo-hyun.

He committed suicide 5/23, 2009. 

>> He committed suicide on May 23, 2009.

He was the president of Korea 2003~2008. 

>> He was the president of Korea from 2003 to 2008.

During his time my age was 42-47. 

>> During his time, my age was between 42 and 47.

Most Korean president were high class level class. 

>> Most Korean presidents belonged to the upper class.

However, he was from rural area and graduated a commercial high school. 

>> However, he was from a rural area and graduated from a commercial high school.

He became a lawyer and politician.

>> CORRECT 
OR >> He became a lawyer and politician, dedicating his career to both the legal profession and public service.

He had been failed so many elections, such as a member of the National Assembly or governor. 

>> He had failed in many elections, such as running for a seat in the National Assembly or for the position of governor.

Many people had a feeling of sorry for his foolish which he didn’t follow short interest than the highest duty. 

>> Many people felt sorry for his foolishness for not prioritizing his duty over short-term interests.

After his duration, his political enemies harassed him and his family obstinately and continuously.

>> After his term, his political enemies persistently and continuously harassed him and his family.