A fit mind!!

2013-01-09 · 첨삭 강사 Alice

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That the today's homework what I'll choose between a fit body and a fit mind is very difficult. Of course, healthy body is important but, a fit mind is more. This day there are many of the poeple who is suicide. A few days ago, a famous korea star was killing himself. Like this suic ide of the famous people has an effect on many poeple. In general, The serious social problem was caused from negative affectivity. Severe desprssion makes the poeple do exstremly choise. trying to think positively is very good attitude in life. I have beeng trying to this every day! Get a fit mind and a fit body will follow.

강사 첨삭

Hi Christina!^^ Thank you once again for doing your homework. Very good reasoning! Oh my. That\'s a sad news. :( Even though it is best to have both fit mind and body, I think having a fit mind is way better than having a fit body. I definitely agree with you!^^ Call you again tomorrow. I hope you will have an awesome day tomorrow, Christina. Good night!^^ ~Teacher Alice That the today\'s homework what I\'ll choose between a fit body and a fit mind is very difficult.>> Today\'s homework about choosing between a fit body and a fit mind is very difficult.Of course, healthy body is important but, a fit mind is more.>> Of course, healthy body is important but, a fit mind is more important.This day there are many of the poeple who is suicide. >> These days, there are many poeple who commit suicide.A few days ago, a famous korea star was killing himself. >> A few days ago, a famous Korean star killed himself. Like this suic ide of the famous people has an effect on many poeple. >> This suicide of famous people has an effect on many people.In general, The serious social problem was caused from negative affectivity. >> In general, the serious social problem was caused by negative affectivity.Severe desprssion makes the poeple do exstremly choise. >> Severe depression makes people do extreme chaos.trying to think positively is very good attitude in life. >> Trying to think positively is a very good attitude in life.I have beeng trying to this every day! >> I have beeng trying to do this every day!Get a fit mind and a fit body will follow. >> Geting a fit mind and a fit body will follow.

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