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There are many places to go in our country except Haeundae Beach and Jeju Island.

>>There are many places to go in our country aside from Haeundae Beach and Jeju Island.

Tongyoung is called as Naples of Korea.

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Hundreds of islands are scattered in Tongyoung\'s coastal water.

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There is very haromnized and peaceful.

>>It is very tranquil and peaceful there.

There are also Admiral Lee soon shin\'s historic sites.

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He is the person whom was defeated Japan\'s invasion in 1590s.

>>He is the person who defeated Japan\'s invasion in the 1590s.

OR>> He lead the Koreans to defeat Japan\'s invasion in the 1950s.

He protected Korea and has never once defeated the battles of the 21 times.

>>He protected Korea and was never defeated not even once in the 21 battles he fought..

He is a true hero.

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Many people visiting the Namhae near the Tongyoung too.

>>Many people visit Namhae near Tongyeong too.

There is Geumsan Boriam Hermitage which is the one of three prayer in Korea.

>>There is also Geumsan Boriam Hermitage which is one of the three prayer sites/places in Korea.

The one of another Hermitage is the Naksansa-Temple in Yangyang, Kangwon Province.

>>The other Hermitage is the Naksansa-Temple in Yangyang, Kangwon Province.

The Naksansa-Temple can enjoy mountain and sea together.

>>In Naksansa Temple, you can enjoy the view of mountain and the sea together.

The beach is famous for as much as the Haeundae\'s one.

>>The beach is as famous as Haeundae in Busan.

The Eulwangli beach is visiting many people too.

>>Many people visit Eulwangli beach too.

The Eulwangli is located in the west sea, the Naksansa-Temple is located in the east, the Tongyoung and Namhae is located in south sea.

>>Eulwangli is located in the west sea, Naksansa Temple is located in the east sea, Tongyeong and Namhae are located in the south sea.

There are very beautiful. I recommend strongly to you.

>>These are all very beautiful. I strongly recommend it to you.