A Herring

The English in London like fresh herrings. Herrings were caught in the Northern Sea, and it took a long time to bring it to London. But the herrings were exhausted after long travel in a water tank, and the freshness so decresed that no body want to buy it. But, only one man could maintain its freshness while travelling from the northern Sea to London and being sold to Londoners. As a result, he could make a lot of money. Other fisherman asked him how to keep it fresh for a long time, and want to hear answer of the secret. The secret was simple. He put a mullet in the water tank together with herrings, and the herrrings ran away not to be caught and eaten. As a result, they exercised too much and alive vividly. That is the reason why they could be maintained their freshness. A small idea can make a great success.

Dear [Name]. [이름],   A LIVELY and AWESOME Wednesday to you! ^.^   THANK YOU for sharing another writing that is related to life! ^^ Frankly speaking, when I was reading the beginning of the story, I was so curious about how to keep the freshness of fishes after catching them. I thought of a possible way to do that. It is putting a lot of ice into the water tank so that the tank will serve as a fridge where caught fishes will be kept. However, I am still in doubt if that method can solve the problem. And after reading the article, I felt so ashamed, because my strategy was not the way how the smart man maintained the freshness of the herrings that he caught. Well, I am amazed. He is clever.   Anyway, THANK YOU VERY MUCH for the sharing! ^^ Happy reading! ^^, See you later! ^^.    ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~     The English in London like fresh herrings. >> CORRECT! Herrings were caught in the Northern Sea, and it took a long time to bring it to London. >> IT IS BETTER TO SAY: Herrings are caught in the Northern Sea, and before, it took a long time to bring them to London. But the herrings were exhausted after long travel in a water tank, and the freshness so decresed that no body want to buy it. >> I THINK WHAT YOU WANT TO SAY IS: But the herrings were exhausted after a long travel in a water tank, and their freshness decreased that nobody wanted to buy them. But, only one man could maintain its freshness while travelling from the northern Sea to London and being sold to Londoners. >> However, only one man could maintain their freshness while traveling from the Northern Sea to London and being sold to Londoners. (It is not good to use BUT often, so instead of BUT, you should write HOWEVER. ITS FRESHNESS should be THEIR FRESHNESS, because you are pertaining to HERRINGS. TRAVELLING is in BRITISH ENGLISH SPELLING. For AMERICAN ENGLISH SPELLING, there should be one L in the word.) As a result, he could make a lot of money. >> CORRECT! Other fisherman asked him how to keep it fresh for a long time, and want to hear answer of the secret. >> IT IS BETTER TO SAY: Other fisherman asked him about how to keep them fresh for a long time and wanted to hear his answer secretly. (There should be no COMMA after TIME since the idea after AND is not a COMPLETE SENTENCE. PATTERN: ask someone about how to do something) >> OR: Other fisherman asked him about how to keep them fresh for a long time and wanted to know that secret. The secret was simple. >> CORRECT! He put a mullet in the water tank together with herrings, and the herrrings ran away not to be caught and eaten. >> He put a mullet in the water tank together with herrings, and they ran away not to be caught and eaten. (AVOID REDUNDANCY! Instead of the HERRINGS, you should write THEY.) As a result, they exercised too much and alive vividly. >> As a result, they moved too much and stayed alive vividly. (It is better to write MOVED than EXERCISED. There should be a verb after AND, so I out STAYED.) That is the reason why they could be maintained their freshness. >> IT IS BETTER TO SAY: That is the reason why he could maintain their freshness. >> OR: That is the reason why their freshness could be maintained. A small idea can make a great success. >> CORRECT!