A million dollars

2024-03-15 · 첨삭 강사 Ara

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It is a very happy question for everyone. If I have a million dollars, I will give some dollars to my parents. And I would buy iPad with the other dollars. Because buy an iPad is my wish. Also, I would buy some house, snacks and toys for my cat. And I will save the dollars.

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It is a very happy question for everyone.
>>> It is a question that brings joy to everyone.
If I have a million dollars, I will give some dollars to my parents.
>>> If I had a million dollars, I would give some to my parents. 
And I would buy iPad with the other dollars.
>>> Then, I would use the rest to buy an iPad 
Because buy an iPad is my wish.
>>> because it\'s something I\'ve always wanted. 
Also, I would buy some house, snacks and toys for my cat.
>>> Additionally, I would buy some houses, snacks, and toys for my cat. 
And I will save the dollars.
>>> Finally, I would save the remaining money.

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