A past experience that I want to change
학생이 쓴 원문
I am an extrovert when I meet people, and most of time when I spend my day I smile. Therefore, I always have many friends and try to be a good friend to them. However, when I was 19 years old, I didn\'t matter my friends around me. Doing that was out of character for me. I had a big exam as my friends had, which was a Korean SAT called suneung. I didn\'t realize at that time, but now I can realize that I was very keen on those days. Therefore, I was quite more selfish than kind. One day, one of my friends kept repeated behavior that I don\'t like. If it was an ordinary day, perhaps I could repress it, but I didn\'t and finally, I hurt her even the behavior wasn\'t serious. Her and my relationship got worse and it continues until today. I know that I can\'t really change this relationship and the words that I spat out to her past, so I decided to take this opportunity to mature internally. Nowadays, I always try to empathize with others and appreciate my friends by controlling emotions.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jenny! Thank you for this homework. I appreciate the effort and your consistency with learning and practicing the language. ^ ^
This experience must be very hard on you but at least you have learned your lesson. You know what they say, think first before you say something. You wouldn\'t like to utter words you would soon regret.
-Teacher Jedah
>>I am an extrovert when I meet people, and most of the time I spend my day with a smile.
Therefore, I always have many friends and try to be a good friend to them.
>>CORRECT
However, when I was 19 years old, I didn\'t matter my friends around me.
>>However, when I was 19 years old, I didn\'t give much importance with the friends/people around me.
Doing that was out of character for me.
>>Doing that was so much out of my character.
I had a big exam as my friends had, which was a Korean SAT called suneung.
>>CORRECT
I didn\'t realize at that time, but now I can realize that I was very keen on those days.
>>CORRECT
Therefore, I was quite more selfish than kind.
>>CORRECT
One day, one of my friends kept repeated behavior that I don\'t like.
>>One day, my friend kept on repeatedly showing me her behavior I didn\'t like.
If it was an ordinary day, perhaps I could repress it, but I didn\'t and finally, I hurt her even the behavior wasn\'t serious.
>>If it was an ordinary day, perhaps I could ignore her petty behavior, but I uttered words that have hurt her.
Her and my relationship got worse and it continues until today.
>>My relationship with her turned sour up to this day.
I know that I can\'t really change this relationship and the words that I spat out to her past, so I decided to take this opportunity to mature internally.
>>I know that I can\'t really change this relationship and the words that I spat out to her in the past, so I just decided to take this experience to mature and probably learn from it.
Nowadays, I always try to empathize with others and appreciate my friends by controlling emotions.
>>Nowadays, I always try to empathize with others and appreciate my friends and have also learned to control my negative emotions.
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