A person can be neglected to be alone and can be a successful person if luck follows.
학생이 쓴 원문
I imagined that I can be that kind of person when I was young.
But now I am grown up and never that way of thinking.
Real world is more tough than we think in thought.
We must work hard not to be neglected to be alone in the society.
One to ten thousand, one can be successful if a luck follows.
Thanks for reading.
Bye.
강사 첨삭
You had great ideas with your homework. I appreciate that you always relate it with your life which made it more interesting to read. Make homework so that you will improve your English skills more.^_^
But now I am grown up and never that way of thinking.
>>>But now I am a grown up, I don\'t have that way of thinking anymore.
Real world is more tough than we think in thought.
>>>The real world is tougher than I thought.
We must work hard not to be neglected to be alone in the society.
>>>We must work hard not to be neglected and alone in the society.
One to ten thousand, one can be successful if a luck follows.
>>>One to ten thousand, one can be successful if luck follows.
OR>>> One to ten thousand person can be successful if he or she is lucky.
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