A person should never make an important decision alone.
학생이 쓴 원문
I agree with this opinion partially, but I disagree the "never" phrase.
In my case, when I make an important decision, I always decide alone. Even I decide to move another job I made a decision by my self without asking my parents. Also when I found a new place I visited real estate alone and sign a contract by my self.
Except select someone who am I marry with; that is the most decision in my life; I've made a decision by my self.
I think decision is regarding to only me, making a decision by one self is right. However if that decision influence to someone such as marry or hire someone who work in company, we definitely decide after hearing other person's opinion.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! ^^
Thank you for this superb essay. ^^
You\'ve done really well especially in differing this general statement using the word \"never\". ^^ Most of the corrections made, as you can see, was some rephrasing and reiterations to help with the clarity and eloquence.
Also, I definitely agree with your opinion. ^^ Making our own decisions by ourselves is really important since our daily decisions and habits have a huge impact upon both our levels of happiness and success.
All good things,
==Teacher Charlie=
>> I partially agree with this opinion however I disagree with the word \"never\".
In my case, when I make an important decision, I always decide alone. Even I decide to move another job I made a decision by my self without asking my parents. Also when I found a new place I visited real estate alone and sign a contract by my self.
>> In my case, whenever I make an important decision, I always do it alone. When I decided to get another job, I made that decision without consulting my parents and when I got a new place, I went to a real estate office and signed the lease by myself.
Except select someone who am I marry with; that is the most decision in my life; I\'ve made a decision by my self.
>> Except for choosing someone I\'d marry, which is the most important decision for me, I\'ve made most decisions by myself.
I think decision is regarding to only me, making a decision by one self is right. However if that decision influence to someone such as marry or hire someone who work in company, we definitely decide after hearing other person\'s opinion.
>> I think making decisions wherein only I am involved is right. However, if a decision affects someone else, like marrying someone or hiring someone to work in a company, hearing other people\'s opinion is imperative before making a final decision.
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