a person who has difficulty in quitting smoking
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If there is a person who has difficulty in quitting smoking, how would you help him quit?
If he/she is a heavy smoker, it is not easy to quit smoking at once. I will recommend him/her for Electronic Cigarettes. Although there are several harmful ingredients in the Electronic Cigarettes, it contains insignificant levels comparing general cigarettes and it can help reduce smoking. In addition, I will describe harmful influences for his/her health as well as other persons’ with second-hand smoking. If it is not working, I will bring a baby beside by him/her. Anyone can’t smoke beside the baby if he/she has a normal person brain.
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Hello there [이름]^^
You made me smile because of your composition.
Thanks for sending this in today.
Electronic cigarettes are good but I think it is a bit expensive.
I think it will be helpful to those people who really want to quit.
But it really depends on the person if he wants to stop his habit.I appreciate your time, efforts and ideas today. Keep it up!
Great composition! Talk to you very soon.
Teacher Nina
If there is a person who has difficulty in quitting smoking, how would you help him quit?If he/she is a heavy smoker, it is not easy to quit smoking at once.
>> Correct
>> OR: If he/ she is a heavy smoker, it is not easy for him/ her to quit smoking immediately.
I will recommend him/her for Electronic Cigarettes.
>> I will recommend him/ her to use Electronic Cigarettes.
Although there are several harmful ingredients in the Electronic Cigarettes, it contains insignificant levels comparing general cigarettes and it can help reduce smoking.
>> Although there are several harmful ingredients in the Electronic Cigarettes, it contains insignificant components compared to cigarettes and it can help reduce smoking.
In addition, I will describe harmful influences for his/her health as well as other persons’ with second-hand smoking.
>> Correct
>> OR: In a ddition, it will give him harmful effect to his/ her health as well as the people who inhales it.
If it is not working, I will bring a baby beside by him/her.
>> If it is not working, I will bring a baby beside hi/m her.
>> OR: If it doesn\'t work, I will carry a baby beside him/ her.
Anyone can’t smoke beside the baby if he/she has a normal person brain.
>> Did you mean: Anyone, can\'t smoke beside a baby if he/ she is conscious about it.
>> OR: Anyone, can\'t smoke beside a baby if he/ she has a good mind.
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