a place I will never forget (5/3)
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Hi,the first lesson time with you was so comfortable and helpful.
And the correction comments on online was, too. Thank you.
Describing a place I'll never forget,I want to tell a town in Japan that I visited with my first son last year. It's 'Yufuin'.We went there when November was going to end. Many houses in the town have springs and we stayed at the house with a small spring in the backyard. We tried to bath in the spring and so fantastic! Outside of the water was cold but inside was hot! On the surface of the water the vapor kept going up silently. The room we stayed was made in Japanese traditional method,'Dadami'. We slept in 'Gimono',japanese clothes.The town was so beautiful and so comfortable. The air was fresh and the small houses and cutty shops were lined along the small stream.We took the train when we leaved the town. How beautiful the station was,too!The harmony of the black wooden tradional building,old railroad and red maples was remained in my heart untill now.
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Hello there Ms. [이름]. I am happy that you felt that way. ^^
Thank you very much for doing your homework. I really appreciate it.
Please take note of the corrections and feel free to ask questions during the class.
I\'ll talk to you later! ^^
T. Gracelyn
Hi,the first lesson time with you was so comfortable and helpful.
>>correct
And the correction comments on online was, too.
And the correction comments on online was, too.
>>The correction online was also good.
Thank you.
>>correct
Describing a place I\'ll never forget,
Describing a place I\'ll never forget,
>>I will describe a place I\'ll never forget.
I want to tell a town in Japan that I visited with my first son last year.
>>I want to tell you something about a town in Japan that I visited with my first son last year.
It\'s \'Yufuin\'.
>>correct
We went there when November was going to end.
>>We went there at the end of November.
Many houses in the town have springs and we stayed at the house with a small spring in the backyard.
>>Many houses in the town have springs. We stayed in a house with a small spring in the backyard.
We tried to bath in the spring and so fantastic!
>>We tried to take a bath in the spring and it was so fantastic.
Outside of the water was cold but inside was hot!
>>The surface of the water was cold but the groundwater was hot.
The room we stayed was made in Japanese traditional method,\'Dadami\'.
>>The room we stayed in was made of Japanese traditional materials called \'dadami\'.
We slept in \'Gimono\',japanese clothes.
>>We slept with the Japanese traditional clothes called \'Gimono\'.
The town was so beautiful and so comfortable.
>>correct
The air was fresh and the small houses and cutty shops were lined along the small stream.
>>correct
We took the train when we leaved the town.
>>We took the train when we left the town.
How beautiful the station was,too!
>>How beautiful the station was!
>>The station was beautiful too.
The harmony of the black wooden tradional building,old railroad and red maples was remained in my heart untill now.
>>The images of the black wooden traditional building, the old railroad and the red maples remained in my heart until now.
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