A positive result from a risk #1
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In my way of thinking, risk plays a significant role in every person’s life because it not only increases the confidence level but motivates a person to do something new and challenging.
[What it was] I also experienced a risky situation when I decided to quit the previous job to find a more challenging task and vision. I knew that quitting was a huge risk as I already had a suitable job, and to be honest, I was worried and a bit scared.
[Why] At that time, I worked as a regional government officer for a contract worker, so I tried to seek a more stable job position and a challenging field. After quitting the government officer, I had to prepare for an entrance exam for more than six months.
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In my way of thinking, risk plays a significant role in every person’s life because it not only increases the confidence level but motivates a person to do something new and challenging.
>> To my way of thinking, risk plays a significant role in every person’s life because it not only increases the confidence level but motivates a person to do something new and challenging.
[What it was] I also experienced a risky situation when I decided to quit the previous job to find a more challenging task and vision. I knew that quitting was a huge risk as I already had a suitable job, and to be honest, I was worried and a bit scared.
>> [What it was] I also experienced a risky situation when I decided to quit my previous job to find a more challenging task and vision. I knew that quitting was a huge risk as I already had a suitable job, and to be honest, I was worried and a bit scared.
[Why] At that time, I worked as a regional government officer for a contract worker, so I tried to seek a more stable job position and a challenging field. After quitting the government officer, I had to prepare for an entrance exam for more than six months.
>> At that time, I was working as a regional government officer for a contract worker, so I tried to seek a more stable job position and a challenging field. After quitting as a government officer, I had to prepare for an entrance exam for more than six months.
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