\"a sense of control is very important for happiness.\"
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It is important not to get stressful during the pandemic. How would it be possible in the situation of no permission on activities with people? Many governments said Isolation is the only solution to mitigate COVID19. Tail Sharot, Ph.D in psychology, appealed a sense of agency had the strongest effect on happiness: those who felt they had a sense of agency in their day-to-day lives were more satisfied with their lives than others.
I agree that planning our life schedule is the one way to get a sense of agency for us. In my case, planning how to spend my free time is one of sources for happiness these days: where to go hiking or when to go skiing. Main reason is that it makes me feel like I\'ve living well according to my willingness. In case I did as per my schedule, I was proud of myself. Even if I failed to do my plan, I felt good because I did not waste of my time.
To overcome our current situation, we need to always think in a positive way and make a exciting event to cheer us up.
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It is important not to get stressful during the pandemic.
>> Knowing how to cope with stress is generally important - more so during this stressful period.
How would it be possible in the situation of no permission on activities with people?
>> But this is easier said than done because our present circumstances require restrictions on our movements.
Many governments said Isolation is the only solution to mitigate COVID19.
>> Many governments assert that isolation is the only solution to mitigate the effects of COVID-19 and get this pandemic under control.
Tail Sharot, Ph.D in psychology, appealed a sense of agency had the strongest effect on happiness: those who felt they had a sense of agency in their day-to-day lives were more satisfied with their lives than others.
>> Tail Sharot, Ph.D., of UCL Psychology and Language Sciences, has put forward that sense of agency had the strongest effect on happiness as those who felt they possess this sense of control in their day-to-day lives were more satisfied with their lives than others.
I agree that planning our life shedule is the one way to get a sense of agency for us.
>> To develop our sense of agency, I agree that managing our time or planning our daily schedules is one effective way to stimulate us while we are confined at home and our movements are considerably constrained.
In my case, planning how to spend my free time is one of sources for happiness these days: where to go hiking or when to go skiing.
>> In my case, planning how to spend my free time, such as where to go hiking or when to go skiing and so on, is one of the biggest sources of my happiness these days.
Main reason is that it makes me feel like I\'ve living well according to my willingness.
In case I did as per my schedule, I was proud of myself.
>> The main reason is that it makes me feel alive and more in control over my life during these trying times, and whenever I manage to carry out my plans, I honestly feel a sense of accomplishment. I feel that I am living of my own volition.
Even if I failed to do my plan, I felt good because I did not waste of my time.
>> Failing to execute my plan still somehow gives me a feeling of satisfaction as I know for a fact that I didn\'t waste my time.
To overcome our current situation, we need to always think in a positive way and make a exciting event to cheer us up.
>> or: To get through these difficult times, a brighter outlook and exhilarating activities are very much needed.
>> or: The COVID-19 pandemic is undoubtedly one of the darkest periods of modern times and to get through it, a brighter outlook and exhilarating activities are very much needed.
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