A sunny day.

Hello there, Ji [이름]!

It sounds like you had a great time on the beach last time^^
I am lucky to have a chance to check your composition.^^

Today I woke up with a joy. 

>> Today, I woke up with joy.
That is because, our family are going to the beach today. 

>> That is because our family is going to the beach today.                        
So I woke up extra early, and pack my bag. 

>> So I woke up extra early and packed my bag.                                       
Here is what I put in. 

>> Correct.                                                           
First, my swim suit, and a sun cream, and a bottle file with extra cold ice tea. 

>> First, my swim suit, sun cream, and a bottle filled with extra cold ice tea. 
And I ate my breakfast. 

>> Correct                                                          
Then I waited until 8o clock. 

>> Correct                                                    
And we went to the beach. 

>> Correct                                                           
First I put on my sun cream, and then I went flying to the beach. 

>> First, I put on my sun cream, and then I went running to the beach.
And we played until sunset. 

>> Correct                                                             
Aftter that we went back to our house, and we ate our diner, and I went to bed. 

>> After that, we went back to our house, ate dinner then I went to bed.  
to day was a very fun day. 

>> It is a very fun day.                                  
THE END

>> Correct                
 BYE~~

>> Correct