A surprizing thing in Korea
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Nowadays, I'm surprized of seeing a lot of foreigners on the street, which used to be difficult to happen in the past. On the way to the symphony yesterday, I saw many foreigners and two of foregners sat next to me. It might mean that Korea is getting to attract foreigner to live or is desire to live since most people don't want to foreign conturies if living in those places is very inconvenient. Meanwhile, I'm gald to have them because sharing other cultures makes Koreans understand them better. As a result, it is going to help them to be open minded while they used to be conservative and they are not very repectable to foreigne something. I hope it comes out in a great way.
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Hi Helen J
Good day! Since we are now in the modern age, I think it’s about time for us to learn and have knowledge about others cultures.
Happy holiday and see you Friday!
Nicole J
Nowadays, I'm surprized of seeing a lot of foreigners on the street, which used to be difficult to happen in the past.
>> Nowadays, I'm surprised of seeing a lot of foreigners in the street, which used to be unusual in the past.
On the way to the symphony yesterday, I saw many foreigners and two of foregners sat next to me.
>> On the way to the symphony yesterday, I saw many foreigners and two of them sat next to me.
It might mean that Korea is getting to attract foreigner to live or is desire to live since most people don't want to foreign conturies if living in those places is very inconvenient.
>> It might mean that Korea is attracting foreigners to live in our country however most of my fellowmen feel uncomfortable living with them.
Meanwhile, I'm gald to have them because sharing other cultures makes Koreans understand them better.
>> Meanwhile, I'm glad to have them because sharing others culture makes Koreans understands them better.
As a result, it is going to help them to be open minded while they used to be conservative and they are not very repectable to foreigne something.
>> As a result, it will help them to be open-minded because they used to be conservative and they don’t respect foreigners at all.
I hope it comes out in a great way.
>>correct
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