A Valentine's day

2017-02-14 · 첨삭 강사 Megan

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Today is a Valentine's day. When I woke up, my wife gave me a surprise gifts. they were a pair of trunks and a letter. What a pleasant gift they're! I was really thankful and moved. I couldn't imagine because we were planning to eat out restaurant for dinner, I promised myself to give her gorgeous gift on White day. And after we got back from work, we went to restaurant that we'd like to visit. The restaurant is a western style, famous for its pork-cutlet and hamburger steak among Instargram users and trendy bloggers. and it easy to get there, just 10 minutes away from our house. there is a two-story building, the most popular bakery on the 1st floor, many people was queueing up at an entrance. Next time , we'll drop by the bakery. and the restaurant we'll visit is on second floor. tastes of dishes are not bad, and its space is not roomy, but clean. we may visit sooner or later.

강사 첨삭

Dear [이름]!!


Happy Valentines day to you and your wife!!! Enjoy !!


~Teacher Megan~


Love is when the other person\'s happiness is more important than your own.-- H. Jackson Brown, Jr.


HERE ARE MY CORRECTIONS:


Today is a Valentine\'s day.

>>> OR: Today is Valentine\'s day.


When I woke up, my wife gave me a surprise gifts. they were a pair of trunks and a letter.

>>> Correct.


What a pleasant gift they\'re! I was really thankful and moved.

>>> Correct.


 I couldn\'t imagine because we were planning to eat out restaurant for dinner, I promised myself to give her gorgeous gift on White day.

>>>  I couldn\'t imagine that she will be giving me a gift because we were planning to eat out at a restaurant for dinner, I promised myself to give her gorgeous gift on White day.


 And after we got back from work, we went to restaurant that we\'d like to visit.

>>> Correct.


The restaurant is a western style, famous for its pork-cutlet and hamburger steak among Instargram users and trendy bloggers. and it easy to get there, just 10 minutes away from our house.

>>> The restaurant is a western style, famous for its pork-cutlet and hamburger steak. It is famous among Instagram users and trendy bloggers. It is very accessible since it is just 10 minutes away from our house.


 there is a two-story building, the most popular bakery on the 1st floor, many people was queueing up at an entrance.

>>>  It\'s on  a two-story building, the most popular bakery is on the 1st floor, and many people are queuing up at the entrance.


Next time , we\'ll drop by the bakery. and the restaurant we\'ll visit is on second floor.

>>> Next time , we\'ll drop by the bakery before we reach restaurant on the second floor.


 tastes of dishes are not bad, and its space is not roomy, but clean. we may visit sooner or later.

>>> The dishes don\'t taste bad and it\'s spacious but clean. We might visit it sooner or later.

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