A valuable lesson or piece of advice you\\\'ve learned throughout your career journey

2023-11-07 · 첨삭 강사 Hanna

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The thing that I learned throught my career journey is that it is the most important to ensure work-life balance. The start point of my career was in global consulting firm which is famous for hard work intensity. However, I thought that the harder I invest a lot of time in work, the more I can get working skills like presentation, making reports. After I have worked in consulting firm for 2 years, although I could learn so many thing, I lost health, time of relationship, hobby at the same time. These days, I\\\'m working on automobile company which gives me both learning and time for doing anything.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for your homework, Yu [이름]!

Keep going and never stop learning!

-Hanna ^^

The thing that I learned throught my career journey is that it is the most important to ensure work-life balance.

>>The most important lesson I\'ve learned throughout my career journey is the significance of maintaining a work-life balance.
The start point of my career was in global consulting firm which is famous for hard work intensity.

>>I began my career in a global consulting firm known for its demanding work intensity.

However, I thought that the harder I invest a lot of time in work, the more I can get working skills like presentation, making reports.

>>However, I thought that the harder I invest a lot of time at work, the more I can acquire working skills like presentations and making reports.
After I have worked in consulting firm for 2 years, while I did gain valuable skills and experiences, I also lost my health, valuable time for relationships, and hobbies.

>>After I have worked in consulting firm for 2 years, while I did gain valuable skills and experiences, I also lost my health, valuable time for relationships, and hobbies.

These days, I\'m working on automobile company which gives me both learning and time for doing anything.

>>These days, I\'m employed at an automobile company that allows me to continue learning while also providing me with the time to pursue other interests.

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