A Visit to the Park: Describe a visit to a park. What did you do there, and what did you see?
학생이 쓴 원문
I watched people who are stroll or children who playing in the playground. I saw cute kitties live in the park, I took a picture with them.
강사 첨삭
Hi Hyebin, great job on your composition about the park! Thank you for sharing it with me. I noticed a couple of errors, so please take a look at the corrected version below. Let me know if you have any questions or need further assistance! :)
^^T.JAMIE
I watched people who are stroll or children who playing in the playground.
>>I watched people strolling and children playing in the playground.
I saw cute kitties live in the park, I took a picture with them.
>> I saw cute kitties living in the park and took a picture with them.
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