A Wonderful Lottery Plan

2020-07-20 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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If I won the lottery today, I would like to do 3 things: buying a house, offering meals to people to be thankful for, and donating. First, I want to purchase a house. I\'ve always dreamed of having my own house because it means I\'m affluent enough to have a private space. Since it\'s too hard for people who are just starting out in a career to get their house in Seoul because of the price, it\'s better to have my own house when I afford to do it. Second, I would like to offer some meals to people who helped or encouraged me. Many of my achievements are never gotten all by myself, but they can be achieved with the surrounding people. Therefore, I want to shout them nice meals to express my gratitude. Lastly, I\'d love to donate to those who need financial help. I\'m not sure about the exact field where I want to donate; however, I take it for granted that I must share the good fortune if I get it unlabored. To sum up, I want to spend the prize money to fulfill my dream and help other people.

강사 첨삭

Wow! ~~ 
This is one of the most amazing plans I have read! 


~t. Ally


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 If I won the lottery today, I would like to do 3 things: buying a house, offering meals to people to be thankful for, and donating. First, I want to purchase a house. I\'ve always dreamed of having my own house because it means I\'m affluent enough to have a private space. Since it\'s too hard for people who are just starting out in a career to get their house in Seoul because of the price, it\'s better to have my own house when I afford to do it. Second, I would like to offer some meals to people who helped or encouraged me. Many of my achievements are never gotten all by myself, but they can be achieved with the surrounding people. Therefore, I want to shout them nice meals to express my gratitude. Lastly, I\'d love to donate to those who need financial help. I\'m not sure about the exact field where I want to donate; however, I take it for granted that I must share the good fortune if I get it unlabored. To sum up, I want to spend the prize money to fulfill my dream and help other people.
>>  If I won the lottery today, I would like to do 3 things: buy a house, offer meals to people I\'m thankful for, and donate. First, I want to purchase a house. I\'ve always dreamt of having my own house because it means I\'m affluent enough to have a private space. Since it\'s too hard for people who are just starting out a career to get their house in Seoul because of the price, it\'s better to have my own house when I can afford it. Second, I would like to offer some meals to people who helped or encouraged me. Many of my achievements are never gotten all by myself, but they can be achieved because of the people surrounding me. Therefore, I want to give them nice meals to express my gratitude. Lastly, I\'d love to donate to those who need financial help. I\'m not sure about the exact field where I want to donate; however, I will not take for granted that I must share the good fortune if I get it unlabored. To sum up, I want to spend the prize money to fulfill my dream and help other people.

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