a work-related composition
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Actions against the outbreak of COVID-19
- Informed recommendations and work guideline for preventing novel coronavirus infection
- running a hotline 24 hours a day and monitoring colleagues’ health condition.
- Supported to purchase personal protective equipment (face masks, thermometer etc) and distribute it to colleagues
-Prepared the process of screening and supported its operation
- Managed colleagues’ contact recording and reported its statistic weekly
Arranged a medical specialist visiting event for health counseling
Risk assessment of cardio-pulmonary diseases (must be conducted every 2 years by law)
Divided into 5 groups by the results of the assessment and provided counseling by phone to health risk groups and shared healthcare materials through e-mail individually
Developed education contents of Pfizer korea transportation safety and supported to hold Transportation safety campaign.
Surveyed 22 departments to see if there were 11 musculoskeletal burden tasks
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Actions against the outbreak of COVID-19
- Informed recommendations and work guideline for preventing novel coronavirus infection
>> correct~~
- running a hotline 24 hours a day and monitoring colleagues’ health condition.
>> or: running a 24-hour hotline daily and monitoring colleagues\' health condition
- Supported to purchase personal protective equipment (face masks, thermometer etc) and distribute it to colleagues
>> Supported to purchase personal protective equipment (face masks, thermometer, etc) and distribute it to colleagues
-Prepared the process of screening and supported its operation
>> correct~~
- Managed colleagues’ contact recording and reported its statistic weekly
>> correct~~
Arranged a medical specialist visiting event for health counseling
>> correct~~
Risk assessment of cardio-pulmonary diseases (must be conducted every 2 years by law)
>> correct~~
Divided into 5 groups by the results of the assessment and provided counseling by phone to health risk groups and shared healthcare materials through e-mail individually [I find this section a bit confusing. Below is what I understood.]
>> Divided into 5 groups based on the results of the assessment and provided counseling by phone to health risk groups and shared healthcare materials through e-mail individually
Developed education contents of Pfizer korea transportation safety and supported to hold Transportation safety campaign.
>> Developed education contents of Pfizer Korea transportation safety and supported to hold Transportation safety campaign.
Surveyed 22 departments to see if there were 11 musculoskeletal burden tasks
>> correct~~
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