a young guy from Namibia

2010-07-21 · 첨삭 강사 lei

학생이 쓴 원문

I like to see the grapes’ bunches in the background of blue sky which drooped from its vine. While I am enjoying seeing them through my window I become so happy and often forget that I live in the city. Yesterday evening I went out for a walk along the beach. I met a foreign young guy from Namibia to get training about fishery in the Bukyeoung University near here. He agreed to walk with me, so we walked there twice of back and forth. It was very fortunate for me to have a chance to talk with English speaking person pretty long time exchanging our opinion about various subjects. Addition to this he was a Christian. We said goodbye hoping to meet again.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ms. [Name]! Wow! Maybe you are such a green thumb because you are really good at gardening and planting various kinds of plants. So you met this young guy. It is a good chance for you to have a chat with a foreigner and to think that he is also a Christian. I guess you had a good time talking to him. Maybe you could invite him to your church too. ^^ Have a great day Ms. [Name] and I'll see you tomorrow!! Lei :-) I like to see the grapes bunches in the background of blue sky which drooped from its vine. >>correct^^ While I am enjoying seeing them through my window I become so happy and often forget that I live in the city. >>While I was enjoying looking at them through my window I become so happy and often forget that I live in the city.  Yesterday evening I went out for a walk along the beach.  >>correct^^ I met a foreign young guy from Namibia to get training about fishery in the Bukyeoung University near here.  >>I met a foreign young guy from Namibia who was training about fishery in Bukyeoung University near here.  He agreed to walk with me, so we walked there twice back and forth.  >>correct^^ It was very fortunate for me to have a chance to talk with an English speaking person for a pretty long time exchanging our opinion about various subjects.  >>correct^^ Addition to this he was a Christian.  >>In addition, he is a Christian. We said goodbye hoping to meet again. >>We said goodbye hoping that we'll meet again.

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