Abortion

2019-04-17 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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In Korea, Abortion is not allowed. The government and constitutional Court changed their opinion(explanation). Therefore a woman can allow doing abortion as her choice. I was happy when I heard the news. Because It is good options for some women who do not afford to raise a kid or doesn\'t want to give birth to a baby. But suddenly I worried that her decision can be related to valuable life(live). Because of her decision, the baby is not available to see the world and breath. these days the rate of birth is getting lower and lower. I totally understand if social insurance is well settled, so the single mom can raise their kid without hardship and financial impact. Abortion cannot be permitted. But real life, social insurance is not enough supported them and the hardship is only for his or her mom or dad. Furthermore, prejudice of a single mom or dad still exist. I hope that even abortion is allowed, people want to raise their baby and give birth to him or her.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ann!  Great day ahead! Thank you for answering your homework. ^_^

~ T. Irene ~

In Korea, abortion is not allowed.

>>> Correct.

The government and constitutional Court changed their opinion(explanation).

>>> Correct.

Therefore a woman can allow doing abortion as her choice.

>>> Therefore a woman has the choice to have or not to have an abortion.
 I was happy when I heard the news.

>>> Correct.

Because It is good options for some women who do not afford to raise a kid or doesn\'t want to give birth to a baby.

>>>  Because it is a good option for some women who cannot afford to raise or support a kid or simply because they don\'t want to have a child.

But suddenly I worried that her decision can be related to valuable life(live).

>>> But then again, I am worried that her decision will go against the value of life.

Because of her decision, the baby is not available to see the world and breath.

>>> Because of her decision, the fetus won\'t have a chance to see the world.

these days the rate of birth is getting lower and lower.

>>> These days, the birth rate is getting lesser and lesser.
 I totally understand if social insurance is well settled, so the single mom can raise their kid without hardship and financial impact.

>>> I totally understand if social benefits or insurances are stable or good such that a single mom can raise their kid with no economic repercussions. 

 Abortion cannot be permitted.

>>> In this case, abortion should not be permitted.

But real life, social insurance is not enough supported them and the hardship is only for his or her mom or dad.

>>> But in real life, an insurance is not enough to support both of them and the parents need to share responsibilities.

Furthermore, prejudice of a single mom or dad still exist.

>>> Furthermore, prejudice to single moms or dads still exists.

I hope that even abortion is allowed, people want to raise their baby and give birth to him or her.

>>> I hope that even if abortion is allowed, people would still want to give birth and raise their babies.




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