Abortion
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강사 첨삭
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In Korea, abortion is not allowed.
>>> Correct.
The government and constitutional Court changed their opinion(explanation).
>>> Correct.
Therefore a woman can allow doing abortion as her choice.
>>> Therefore a woman has the choice to have or not to have an abortion.
I was happy when I heard the news.
>>> Correct.
Because It is good options for some women who do not afford to raise a kid or doesn\'t want to give birth to a baby.
>>> Because it is a good option for some women who cannot afford to raise or support a kid or simply because they don\'t want to have a child.
But suddenly I worried that her decision can be related to valuable life(live).
>>> But then again, I am worried that her decision will go against the value of life.
Because of her decision, the baby is not available to see the world and breath.
>>> Because of her decision, the fetus won\'t have a chance to see the world.
these days the rate of birth is getting lower and lower.
>>> These days, the birth rate is getting lesser and lesser.
I totally understand if social insurance is well settled, so the single mom can raise their kid without hardship and financial impact.
>>> I totally understand if social benefits or insurances are stable or good such that a single mom can raise their kid with no economic repercussions.
Abortion cannot be permitted.
>>> In this case, abortion should not be permitted.
But real life, social insurance is not enough supported them and the hardship is only for his or her mom or dad.
>>> But in real life, an insurance is not enough to support both of them and the parents need to share responsibilities.
Furthermore, prejudice of a single mom or dad still exist.
>>> Furthermore, prejudice to single moms or dads still exists.
I hope that even abortion is allowed, people want to raise their baby and give birth to him or her.
>>> I hope that even if abortion is allowed, people would still want to give birth and raise their babies.
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