About a short new year's vacation

2016-02-11 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

학생이 쓴 원문

This new year's day is 5 days.It was too boring.I don't like to go to my grandparent's house but I like get a pocket money.I earn 32millionwon.I played with my younger brother.It was boring too.I can't play a smartphone game.And I watch a Tv.My mom make me don't see a TV at night.So I slept early because of my mom.My youngest brother was hurt because of my younger brother.We had a boring time and next day we went to my mom's house.I like my grandmother.I ate a lot of food because I was very hungry and there is a lot meat.Next day I stay at my mom's home and watch TV and play catch ball.It was fun.And I have to do my math homework.It is very stressful. I really hate math.I can't understand why do I have to do math.If I solve a lot of math problem I will be so angry.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^

Well, I guess you didn\'t enjoy your vacation according to

your essay. It was stressful and boring. But, anyway, at least you earned a lot of

money from your relatives. Be happy about it. kiki.


I will see you in our next class. :)

Take care :)


~~ Teacher Kris


This new year\'s day is 5 days.

>> The New New Year\'s day vacation was only 5 days.

It was too boring.

>> Correct

I don\'t like to go to my grandparent\'s house but I like get a pocket money.

>> I didn\'t like to go my grandparent\'s house but I liked the pocket money that was given to me.

I earn 32millionwon.

>> I earned 32 million Won.

I played with my younger brother.

>> Correct

It was boring too.

>> Correct

I can\'t play a smartphone game.

>> I couldn\'t play smartphone games too.

And I watch a Tv.

>> I watched TV instead.

My mom make me don\'t see a TV at night.

>> My mom didn\'t allow me to watch TV at night.

So I slept early because of my mom.

>> Correct

My youngest brother was hurt because of my younger brother.

>> Correct

We had a boring time and next day we went to my mom\'s house.

>> We had a boring time and on the next day, we went to my mom\'s house.

I like my grandmother.

>> Correct

I ate a lot of food because I was very hungry and there is a lot meat.

>> I ate a lot of food because I was very hungry and there was a lot of meat.

Next day I stay at my mom\'s home and watch TV and play catch ball.

>> On the next day, I stayed at my mom\'s house--watched TV and played catch.

It was fun.

>> Correct

And I have to do my math homework.

>> And I had to do my Math homework.

It is very stressful. I really hate math.

>> It was very stressful. I really hate Math.

I can\'t understand why do I have to do math.

>> Correct

If I solve a lot of math problem I will be so angry.

>> Correct

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