About children\'s use of social networking sites.
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t think children should be allowed to use social networking sites. Because there are a lot of bad things about social networking sites that are inappropriate for kids. I think children are too young to experience such shortcomings.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Sheila! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next week! :)
~ Teacher Tricia
I don\'t think children should be allowed to use social networking sites.
>>> CORRECT!
Because there are a lot of bad things about social networking sites that are inappropriate for kids.
>>> CORRECT!
I think children are too young to experience such shortcomings.
>>> CORRECT!
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