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Jean ~~
I want to be pastry chef after 10 years.
>>> I want to be a pastry chef after 10 years.
From I started having a dream, I\'m always make effort to close my dream.
>>> I\'m the kind of person who would chase my dream no matter what.
I\'m learning confectionery, baking at the school.
>>> I\'m learning confectionery and baking at school.
I have to standing, moving for the class time.
>>> I have to stand and move a lot during the class.
So I can\'t take a rest middle of class time but in order to achieve my dream, I\'m studying and reviewing pastry theory hard, studying English to go to aborde study.
>>> That\'s why I can\'t take a rest in the middle of the class but to achieve my dream, I\'m studying and reviewing pastry theory hard and studying English at the same time so I can go abroad.
And study French fine dessert and plating.
>>> Also, I\'m studying French fine dessert and plating.
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