About dying

2017-02-13 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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All men must die. Death is a human's fate. It is inevitable. Socrates say that death may be the greatest of all human blessings. I will die someday in the future, too. I had operated stomach cancer six years ago. I was third phase of stomach cancer. At that time, I thought a lot about the death. What is a death? Why should human do die? At Coming back home in the hospital, I said to my wife "you should live well with our sons" My wife cried bitterly. I was sad too. But the operation was completed successfully. I was completely cured of medical treatment. I am living normally. I felt empirically that death is neither a blessing nor a fear. After the critical moment, I am trying to live hard. Death is only a process that we needs to go through.

강사 첨삭

Hi there sir [이름]!

You were lucky to be given  a second chance in life. Many people aren\'t so lucky.

I often say to my sisters and my friends that I\'m not afraid of dying. I told them I could go anytime because unlike them, I don\'t have children to think about. Even if I leave early, it\'s okay. But I don\'t know. Maybe, when my time comes, I\'ll be begging God to extend my life at the last minute. (LOL)

Take care!

~T. Lynn

All men must die. Death is a human\'s fate. It is inevitable.

>> correct!

Socrates say that death may be the greatest of all human blessings.

>> correct!

 I will die someday in the future, too.

>> correct!

I had operated stomach cancer six years ago.

>> I had an operation for stomach cancer six years ago.

 I was third phase of stomach cancer.

>> I had the third stage of stomach cancer.

At that time, I thought a lot about the death.

>> At that time, I thought a lot about death.

OR>> At that time, I thought a lot about dying.

What is a death? Why should human do die?

>> What is death? Why should humans die?

At Coming back home in the hospital, I said to my wife \"you should live well with our sons\" 

>> Upon coming back home from the hospital, I said to my wife, You should live well with our sons.\"

My wife cried bitterly. I was sad too.

>> correct!

But the operation was completed successfully.

>> correct!

OR>> But the operation was successful.

I was completely cured of medical treatment.

>> I was completely cured from cancer due to the medical treatment.

I am living normally.

>> correct!

OR>> I am now living normally.

I felt empirically that death is neither a blessing nor a fear.

>> I felt empirically that death is neither a blessing nor to be feared.

After the critical moment, I am trying to live hard.

>> correct!

OR>> After the most critical moment of my life, I am trying to live the best I can.

Death is only a process that we needs to go through.

>> Death is only a process that we need to go through.


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