About happiness

2011-08-10 · 첨삭 강사 May

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Happiness is a emotion. And this feeling occurs in dirrent situation. Each people have diffrent thougs,mind and character. So everyone has their own situation. So to some people having a lot of money makes them feel happy. But for odthers who have diffrent though about money will not be happy even though they have a lot of money

강사 첨삭

Hi! [이름], You did a terrific job in this composition.  It's pretty hard to tell what does bring happiness right? So just stay happy and enjoy life. -Teacher May-   Happiness is a emotion. >>Happiness is an emotion.  And this feeling occurs in dirrent situation. >> And this feeling occurs in different situations.  Each people have diffrent thougs,mind and character. >> Each people have different thoughts, mentality and character.So everyone has their own situation. >>Correct So to some people having a lot of money makes them feel happy. >>Some people having lots of money makes them feel happy. But for odthers who have diffrent though about money will not be happy even though they have a lot of money >> But for other people who have a different perception about money, they will not be happy even though they have lots of money.

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