About heart attack!

2020-12-03 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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There are some bad habits that hurt our heart. . Sitting for a long time without movement . Eating the same food for a long time . Fatting . Exposure to stress Heart attack is that heart muscles stop. The reason is that the heart does not be provided enough air. I know that one of the symptoms of a heart attack is a heartache.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] Ha!
Thank you for opening up to me in class.
I appreciate your honesty.
Let\'s make our classes more entertaining.^^
Here, please take note of the proper terms to use.
Emotions and medical terms are different.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
There are some bad habits that hurt our heart.
>> There are some bad habits that harm our heart.
Sitting for a long time without movement
>> Sitting for a long time without moving
Eating the same food for a long time
>> Eating the same kind of food for a long time
Fatting
>> Getting fat
Exposure to stress
>> Correct
Heart attack is that heart muscles stop.
>> Heart attack is a condition where the heart muscles stop.
The reason is that the heart does not be provided enough air.
>> The reason is that the heart is not provided enough air.
I know that one of the symptoms of a heart attack is a heartache.
>> I know that one of the symptoms of a heart attack is chest pain.

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