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2020-09-17 · 첨삭 강사 Sheila

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi, teacher sheila. I think there is a generation gap. It was easy for men to live in my parents\' generation. Because of our traditional culture that a patriarchal society. In a generation a little older t[이름] me, patriarchal culture has disappeared, making it easier for women to live. But, recently feminist policies went over line. So ignorant men began to recognize that it was a wrong policy. But still, I think it is easier for women to live in my country t[이름] most countries. I\'m thinking of taking a break for a week or two and applying for class again. T[이름]k you.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름] Ho! T[이름]k you for always taking the time to do your homework! Your homework is special today! You almost got a perfect score! :)

You are always welcome to come back. Have a good rest. 

Until the next one!

See you in class next time!

~Teacher Sheila


I think there is a generation gap.
>>CORRECT

It was easy for men to live in my parents\' generation. 
>>CORRECT

Because of our traditional culture that a patriarchal society. 
>>Because of our traditional culture which is a patriarchal society.

In a generation a little older t[이름] me, patriarchal culture has disappeared, making it easier for women to live. 
>>CORRECT
OR>>In the generation a little older t[이름] me, patriarchal culture has lessened, making it easier for women to live.

But, recently feminist policies went over line. 
>>But recently, femenist policies went over the line.

So ignorant men began to recognize that it was a wrong policy. 
>>CORRECT
OR>>So, ignorant men began to claim that it was a wrong policy.

But still, I think it is easier for women to live in my country t[이름] most countries.
>>CORRECT

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