About LOVE

2012-06-21 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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When I was young, I loved her who is my classmate. Then I just like her without conditions because she is beautiful and very kind. These day, people often call the situation a purity. Many people who is with age often miss the purity which almost we have when we were young. So, they don't love easily because they have many conditions to choice their love. Sometimes I'm missed when I was young because although we were young, we don't lie about our true heart. Jean Paul Sartre say "Life is C between B and D". We have no choice that we always live with choice. I want that many people become unreasonable chooser when only they start their love.

강사 첨삭

Wow! That was a very good composition you make my dear [이름]! Now I really don\'t believe that you dont have a girlfriend because you are such a very sweet and kiind guy.. I know a lot of women like you!! Anyway keep up the good work baby.. here are the modifications I made for you.. talk to you again tomorrow and take care.. xoxoTeacher Cam^^ When I was young, I loved her who is my classmate. >>When I was young, I loved someone who was my classmate. Then I just like her without conditions because she is beautiful and very kind. >>Then I just liked her without conditions because she is beautiful and very kind. These day, people often call the situation a purity.>>correct Many people who is with age often miss the purity which almost we have when we were young. >>Many people my age often miss the purity which we had when we were young.So, they don\'t love easily because they have many conditions to choice their love.>>So they dont love easily because they have many conditions to choose from.Sometimes I\'m missed when I was young because although we were young, we don\'t lie about our true heart.>>Sometimes I miss those times when I was young because we dont lie about our true heart.Jean Paul Sartre say \"Life is C between B and D\". >>correct We have no choice that we always live with choice. >>We have no choice but to live the life that we have.I want that many people become unreasonable chooser when only they start their love. >>I want many people to love unconditional.

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