About Me!
학생이 쓴 원문
My name is [Name]-[이름], [이름], but [이름] is difficult to pronunciate. So I made my English name. I am 40 years old. I don\'t get used to be my age. I hate getting old. When I was in Australia, I met a married couple. A wife of the couple asked my age, after knowing my age she was surprised. People from other countries estimate my age younger than my real age. That\'s why, I love to go to other countries. I used to belong in a soccer club. I was fast, and powerful, but not now. I do exercise every evening to get my previous body shape. I have been walking out in every evening, although yellow dust is the worst situation. I lost some weight, and I got a sore throat and a runny nose.
I feel a little bit dizzy, because I took a medicine also.
I don\'t know how I wrote this article. See you tomorrow. Bye~!
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I think you did very well!! Thank you for doing this article. :)
My name is [Name]-[이름], [이름], but [이름] is difficult to pronunciate.
>> My name is [Name]-[이름], [이름], but [이름] is difficult to enunciate.
>> OR: >> My name is [Name]-[이름], [이름], but I think [이름] is difficult to pronounce.
So I made my English name.
>> So, I chose an English name for myself.
I am 40 years old. I don\'t get used to be my age.
>> I am 40 years old. I think I won\'t get used to being my age.
I hate getting old. When I was in Australia, I met a married couple.
>> Correct.
A wife of the couple asked my age, after knowing my age she was surprised.
>> The woman asked my age when I told her, she was surprised.
People from other countries estimate my age younger than my real age.
>> Correct.
That\'s why, I love to go to other countries. I used to belong in a soccer club.
>> That\'s why I love to go to other countries. I used to belong in a soccer club.
I was fast, and powerful, but not now.
>> I was fast and powerful, but now, I am not.
I do exercise every evening to get my previous body shape.
>> I exercise every evening to get my previous body shape.
I have been walking out in every evening, although yellow dust is the worst situation.
>> I have been walking out every evening, although the yellow dust situation got worst.
I lost some weight, and I got a sore throat and a runny nose.
>> I lost some weight which is a good thing, but I got a sore throat and a runny nose.
I feel a little bit dizzy, because I took a medicine also.
>> I feel a little bit dizzy because I took medicine again.
I don\'t know how I wrote this article. See you tomorrow. Bye~!
>> Correct!
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