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<Me> Hello, I would like to introduce myself to you. I'm Jae-min Kim ,17years old, I have 5 families father, mother, sister, brother and me. whether they are not perfect I love all of them. my hobby is play computer games, and play sports. I like play soccer, squash, badminton, table tennis and swimming. but I like eating most, I like eating more than anything. my favorite color is yellow but I don't buy yellow cloth. In my opinion, my personality is not very good~because I have a little bit blast of personality but sometimes also kind. &nbsp; I'm korean but I study in chinese school because in one's childhood my parents said you have must to go chinese school. First time, it is very difficult to adapt learn chinese, and have a grievance against my parents that make me to go chines school, let me experience different way from another korean but now I'm really thanks to my parents and i'm interest in chinese. My target is to study English and Chinese hard then be diplomat

Hi [이름]! Thank you for sending a nice composition. It's your first time to your composition so I was really amazed. It was a very good composition telling more about you. Just stay focus and follow what you really want in life. Just beleive in yourself!!! T. Judy Here are my corrections: <Me> >>About Me Hello, I would like to introduce myself to you. >> Hello! I would like to introduce myself to you. I\'m Jae-min Kim ,17years old, I have 5 families father, mother, sister, brother and me. >> I\'m Jae-min Kim and I'm 17 years old. We are 5 members in the family; my father, mother, older sister, younger brother and me. >> I\'m Jae-min Kim, 17 years of age. We are 5 members in the family; my father, mother, older sister, younger brother and me. whether they are not perfect I love all of them. >> Even though they are not perfect, I love all of them.my hobby is play computer games, and play sports. >> My hobbies are playing computer games and sports.  I like play soccer, squash, badminton, table tennis and swimming. but I like eating most, I like eating more than anything. >> I like to play soccer, squash, badminton, table tennis and swimming but I like eating most. I like it more than anything else. my favorite color is yellow but I don\'t buy yellow cloth. >> My favorite color is yellow but I don\'t buy yellow clothes. In my opinion, my personality is not very good~because I have a little bit blast of personality but sometimes also kind. >> In my opinion, my personality is not very good because I have a little bit blast of personality but sometimes I'm also kind.I\'m korean but I study in chinese school because in one\'s childhood my parents said you have must to go chinese school. >> I\'m Korean but I study in a Chinese school because during our childhood, my parents said that we must go to Chinese school. First time, it is very difficult to adapt learn chinese, and have a grievance against my parents that make me to go chines school, let me experience different way from another korean but now I\'m really thanks to my parents and i\'m interest in chinese. >> First time, it was very difficult to adapt and learn Chinese. I have a grievance against my parents that made me go to Chinese school. They want me to experience difference of Chinese school from Korean school. But now, I'm thankful to my parents because I'm now interested in learning Chinese. My target is to study English and Chinese hard then be diplomat >> My target is to study English and Chinese very hard then I want to become a diplomat someday.