About money
학생이 쓴 원문
Do you think it is more important to make a lot of money or to enjoy your job?
I think enjoying work is important, but making a lot of money is more important. Because money is power in our society. We can buy anything and go anywhere we want. And we can help people in need. This is money.
강사 첨삭
Hi, dear.
Thank you so much for sending me your composition. I totally agree with your answer.
Money is really important. Without it, we can\'t survive.
See you later in class, Byung Gyu! ^^
~Teacher ERIN
I think enjoying work is important, but making a lot of money is more important.
>>CORRECT
Because money is power in our society.
>>CORRECT
We can buy anything and go anywhere we want. And we can help people in need. This is money.
>>CORRECT
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