about my family

2011-03-14 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Hi Julie. Today I want to talk about my family members. My father is in his mid-fifties. He works for a bank and he is a very hard working person. His face is plain and he is a little bit plump. My mother is an elementary school teacher. She is meticulous and amiable. I look very much like her. I'm the second of two children. My sister is 29 years old. She is very bubbly and attractive. She didn't get married yet but she has a plan to marry this year. I hope the tsunami will not influence any other countries including the Philippine. Take care and have a memorable weekend:D

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My Dear [이름], It was nice hearing about your family?Family is the most important people in out lives. I was impress that you only had few mistakes?Fighting! Haha Have a great and memorable weekend too! =D God bless, Julie ^^* Hi Julie. >>CORRECT^^ Today I want to talk about my family members. >>CORRECT^^My father is in his mid-fifties. >>CORRECT^^ He works for a bank and he is a very hard working person. >>CORRECT^^ His face is plain and he is a little bit plump. >>His face is normal? 뻌se normal instead ^^My mother is an elementary school teacher. >>CORRECT^^ She is meticulous and amiable. >>CORRECT^^ I look very much like her. >>CORRECT^^I'm the second of two children. >>CORRECT^^ My sister is 29 years old. >>CORRECT^^ She is very bubbly and attractive. >>CORRECT^^ She didn't get married yet but she has a plan to marry this year. >>CORRECT^^I hope the tsunami will not influence any other countries including the Philippine. >> I hope the tsunami will not affect any other countries including the Philippines. Take care and have a memorable weekend:D >>CORRECT^^

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