About My memorable vacation

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About before 2months, I had been to japan.

>>> About two months ago, I have been to Japan.
 My first overseas trip was Singapore.

>>> OR: My first overseas was when I went to Singapore.
 So Japan is second one.

>>> So my trip to Japan is the second one.

 But There were some differences.

>>> But there were some differences.
 That\'s the point of my essay.

>>> Correct!

 Singapore trip was provided by my university.

>>> My trip to Singapore was funded by my university.
 So I had gone to singapore with my friends,
But I didn\'t want to do.

>>> So, I went to Singapore with my friends despite the fact that I didn\'t want the idea of them tagging along.  

Because, I needed to have a time that i thought and felt something alone.

>>> I needed to have some time alone.
 But i had no other options, cause I was just a receiver that provided trip for free.

>>> But I didn\'t have a choice because I was just given a free travel.

 So, I had wanted to go to abroad alone.

>>> I always wanted to go abroad alone.
 And i nailed it after i got a job.

>>> And I nailed it after I got a job.

 Actually, I was not success to experience Super Special Things.

>>> Actually, I didn\'t experience super special things.
 And.. I think overseas trip is not special but some people think like that.
>>> So, I think overseas trip is not special even though some people think like that.
But I felt happy, because That was the first experience that keep promise for myself.
>>> But I felt happy because that was the first promise to myself that was able to materialize.

 That\'s the why i love that experience.

>>> That\'s why I love that experience.
 Japan trip was not taking some real things,
But I given the bigger one than i didn\'t given.

>>> My trip to Japan was not that special but I got something big from that trip.

 It\'s ... Confidence.

>>> I was able to boost my confidence.
 That I think i can everything If i want to.

>>> That made me realize that I will be able to anything which I put my heart into.