About my visit to Philipines

2024-10-28 · 첨삭 강사 Sonny

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When I was late 20\'s, I felt like I didn\'t belong here to the office which I had worked back then. I got so much stress to work. Every day I couldn\'t find any motivation to go to work. So I decided to quit my office job and have a break to rebuild my carreer and my life. Two of my old friends from elementary school had been to Philipines to study English and travel. They recommended me to go there. So I also went to Davao, Philipines that time. I had stayed there for 3 months to study English. It was really good to practice English and take a rest. Even though I sometimes saw lizards in my room, I really loved that places. I stayed in some renovated building which was a resort once. My room had a ocean view. So my morning call was boat horns and bird\'s singings. I didn\'t have to set the alarm because of the bright sunshine from my window. I felt like my health was getting better and better due to the natural environments of Philipines. People were so friendly and always keep smiling.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ms. [Name]! I am so glad to know you survived that difficult time and completely got the healing you deserve in the Philippines. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
When I was late 20\'s, I felt like I didn\'t belong here to the office which I had worked back then. 
>>When I was in my late 20s, I felt like an outcast in the company where I had worked back then.
I got so much stress to work. 
>I got so much stress from work. 
Every day I couldn\'t find any motivation to go to work. 
>>Correct!
So I decided to quit my office job and have a break to rebuild my carreer and my life. 
>>So I decided to quit my office job and have a break to rebuild my career and my life. 
Two of my old friends from elementary school had been to Philipines to study English and travel. 
>>Two of my old friends from elementary school had been to the Philippines to study English and travel. 
They recommended me to go there. 
>>Correct!                                             
So I also went to Davao, Philipines that time. 
>>So, I took their recommendation and went to Davao, Philippines then.
I had stayed there for 3 months to study English. 
>>Correct!
It was really good to practice English and take a rest. 
>> It was great to practice English and take a rest.
Even though I sometimes saw lizards in my room, I really loved that places. 
>>Even though there were times when I saw lizards in my room, I loved that place so much.
I stayed in some renovated building which was a resort once. 
>>I stayed in a renovated building that was once a resort. 
My room had a ocean view. 
>>My room had an ocean view. 
So my morning call was boat horns and bird\'s singings. 
>>So my alarm clock was the boat horns and birds singing. 
I didn\'t have to set the alarm because of the bright sunshine from my window. 
>>Correct!
I felt like my health was getting better and better due to the natural environments of Philipines.
>>It felt like my health was ameliorated and boosted through nature in the Philippines.
People were so friendly and always keep smiling.
>>People were so amiable and all smiles.

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