about poverty

2012-09-24 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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I think poverty's definition is state of lack or absence for at least living. Typical example is lack of money. We are living in the capitalist system, so it's natural thing that the word "poverty" is formed. And there are two sort of poverty. First, as i gave an example "lack of money", it is economic factor and this is external poverty. This people are really pity and rich people or government had better help this people. Because we are not only capitalism and market economics but also world that live together with our neighborhood. Second sort is also serious thing, that is internal poverty. This sort of people have menatally poverty. They compare with other people and so depressed that can't be happy even they earn much money than the first sort of people. Both of poverties are serious and the thing that should overcome. We are tring to not being have that poverties.

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Wow, that was quite an impressive composition you made my dear, very good job! I do believe that all countries possess this poverty issues and we must also help them overcome them. Anyway, two thumbs up for you baby.. Cant wait to talk to you again later my dear..:) Take care always.. xoxoTeacher Cam^^ I think poverty\'s definition is state of lack or absence for at least living. >>correct Typical example is lack of money. >>correct >>A typical example is lack of money. We are living in the capitalist system, so it\'s natural thing that the word \"poverty\" is formed. >>correct >>We are living in a capitalist system so its natural that poverty exists. And there are two sort of poverty. >>correct >>There are 2 kinds of poverty.First, as i gave an example \"lack of money\", it is economic factor and this is external poverty. >>correct This people are really pity and rich people or government had better help this people. >>These people are really pityful and rich people or the government had better help them. Because we are not only capitalism and market economics but also world that live together with our neighborhood. >>Because we are not just living in a capitalist system but the world also has to live together. Second sort is also serious thing, that is internal poverty. >>correct >>The second type of poverty is somewhat serious. This sort of people have menatally poverty. >>These people have mental poverty. They compare with other people and so depressed that can\'t be happy even they earn much money than the first sort of people. >>They tend to compare themselves to other people and they get depressed that they cant be happy with the money that they earn. Both of poverties are serious and the thing that should overcome. >>Both types are serious and we have to overcome these. We are tring to not being have that poverties. >>We are trying not to have this kind of situation.

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