About that video game addiction is a disease.
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I don\'t think it\'s a diease, too. Because games are just an activity. And Playing game is a job for someone. But only paly game that don\'t fulfill their\'s duty is a obvious problem. And I think moderate play game is no problem. Moderate play game can solve the stress!
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I don\'t think it\'s a diease, too. Because games are just an activity.
>> I don\'t think it\'s a disease as well. Because, playing games are just activities too.
And Playing game is a job for someone.
>> and playing games is a job for other people too.
But only paly game that don\'t fulfill their\'s duty is a obvious problem.
>> But, people that does not do their duties is an obvious problem.
And I think moderate play game is no problem.
>> And I think playing games moderately is not a problem.
Moderate play game can solve the stress!
>> Playing video games moderately can also release stress!
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