About the aging population
학생이 쓴 원문
We getting old and next generations should carry on their elders.
Birthrate is low than elderly population in South Korea.
South Korea has the lowest fertility rate in the world.
Elderly people are weak person in society and they need help.
But, Younger generation decrease in future.
So, That will be a class that is difficult to live without the help of the state.
Therefore, The state should expand public welfare for elderly population!
강사 첨삭
It is indeed hard to survive without balance, Da[이름]! I hope your country can find a better solution to this social issue.-Faith-
We getting old and next generations should carry on their elders.
We getting old and next generations should carry on their elders.
>> We are getting old, and the next generation should carry on the legacy of their elders.
Birthrate is low than elderly population in South Korea.
>> The birthrate is lower than the elderly population in South Korea.
South Korea has the lowest fertility rate in the world.
>> South Korea has the lowest fertility rate in the world.
Elderly people are weak person in society and they need help.
>> Elderly people are vulnerable members of society, and they need help.
But, Younger generation decrease in future.
>> However, the younger generation will decrease in the future.
So, That will be a class that is difficult to live without the help of the state.
>> Thus, that will be a class that is difficult to live without the help of the state.
Therefore, The state should expand public welfare for elderly population!
>> Therefore, the state should expand public welfare for the elderly population.
Birthrate is low than elderly population in South Korea.
>> The birthrate is lower than the elderly population in South Korea.
South Korea has the lowest fertility rate in the world.
>> South Korea has the lowest fertility rate in the world.
Elderly people are weak person in society and they need help.
>> Elderly people are vulnerable members of society, and they need help.
But, Younger generation decrease in future.
>> However, the younger generation will decrease in the future.
So, That will be a class that is difficult to live without the help of the state.
>> Thus, that will be a class that is difficult to live without the help of the state.
Therefore, The state should expand public welfare for elderly population!
>> Therefore, the state should expand public welfare for the elderly population.
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